By
Aahna Jain
A spider in the web-
finding it is easy. as easy
as meeting him always
three blocks north and one turn left
the red house next to the peepal tree
the doorbell rings r i n g s r i n g s.
as easy as freedom
inside these bars
on the other sides
even in the narrow godly slits
I extend my hand
against the poles I push p u s h p u s h. as easy as rummaging the red velvet dress
my mother's gift
in the small cottage among useless possessions I rake r a k e r a k e .
Peace like other spiders
is deep inside the tangles of my mind and other webs.
I know it's there exactly there
I want it I need it but
I try to reach out o u t o u t.
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Beautiful use of imagery!
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Amazing lines
Amazing thoughts beautifully written keep it up
Amazing thoughts beautifully written keep it up
A haunting delineation of the absence, and at the same time, subtle presence, of peace in our lives. Resonated with me at so many levels and would certainly stay with me for long.Loved the unsettling anxiety in the conclusion. Congratulations buddy!♥🤙
Outstanding…….keep writing
Outstanding…….keep writing
Brilliantly portrayed!! Amazing poem
Beautifully written… 😍😍Excellent choice of words. Keep writing!!
An intimate but relatable take on peace, an emotion which unsettles us more than any other. The use of metaphors, a distinguishing characteristic of your poems, is, again, beyond brilliant. The juxtaposition of the spider with peace took me by surprise, and the elusiveness associated with both is rather apt.
Congratulations for being among the top ten at the tender age of 15,and of course, for the expectional writing style you’ve developed.😍😍🤘
Keep up the good work!!👍
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Right through the 💓
Superb… Keep it up
Amazing poem
Well done.
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Amazing poem 😍