By Krithika Sudarsanam
Man does all things after a very deep think
Thro' God given excellent brain that causes occasional drain.
But man is ruled by heart thro' its special known art
Even if he knows it to be wrong he proceeds b'coz of its long.
At times when master is ready for a new steady
State, surely says you will fail in this new sail.
But if the master knows it to be a sure "NO"
It's after her cry that man decides for a try.
Though the master at top always tries to stop
her; she from within surely says "you may ",
Again if sometimes master can put a ban
Then she mails him and so he decides to hail.
Even if the brain for some reasons may treason
us; hath mostly never cheats and provides a good treasure.
Good thought and write up.
Selected words.
As usual the author exhibits her vocabulary and talent.
Best wishes
The poem expresses the thought – where there is will there is a way. How the heart with its persuasion makes us do things even when brain knows the path might be difficult. The heart hope never dies even when brain can desert us some times. This might be a short poem but it carries a depth of emotions.
Nice choice of words.
It’s the little things in life, makes big impact.
Keep doing, what makes you happy..
The words and phrase u used to narrate the poem was extraordinary, great job krithika. Keeping going👍
Such a thoughtful and beautifully written poem, Krithika. The way you’ve expressed the heart vs. mind battle is truly relatable and touching. Every line carries so much meaning and depth, it feels like you’ve written what many of us silently go through. Proud to see your talent shine in this way. Keep exploring, keep writing, and may your words continue to inspire many more.
This poem beautifully captures the eternal conversation between the brain and the heart. With simple yet powerful lines, it shows how reason and emotion constantly guide, resist, and complement each other in human life. The imagery of the brain as the cautious master and the heart as the gentle persuader makes the poem both profound and relatable. It reminds us that true wisdom lies not in choosing one over the other, but in listening to both — the logic of the mind and the passion of the heart. Very well done Krithika maam, it’s really wonderful coordination of both brain and heart. Congratulations 🎊.
Well expressed Krithika! Thoughtful and creative with a relatable theme. The metaphors and rhyme scheme add depth. Keep striving and soar to greater heights. Best Wishes!
U have captured the ’say ’of the brain and heart in a rhythmic and lucid way..
Really impressive..keep going.
Nice work with rhythemic words.
I wish you to come up and up in this platform.
All the best.
Nice Krithika. You have written with the command from the Brain and Acceptance from the Heart.
Well coordinated by by B &H.
Continue your passion.
All the best
Great work Krithika.. happy to see your growth in every field you choose.
The poem is really nice.. well used words and phrases. Each one of us can relate to it coz’ everyone will go through this fight between the heart and mind.
Keep doing many more.. all the best for your future!!
Excellent composition…the rhyming words aww…meaningful and also beautiful ….the words u have chosen add beauty to the essence ….the battle between the brain nd heart is so wonderfully expressed in ur way …. Congratulations …expecting more nd more of such masterpieces frm u …
Excellent words and so true words about the brain and heart connection. Good work.