By Kriti Choudhary
What's a true man without guilt,
What's a true man who hasn't seen others built,
Through lights and darks of life,
Somewhere thunder of jealousy strikes.
And from there starts the war,
in which jealousy messes up with the brain
loosing all senses a man lives for.
Victory without any happiness is soon celebrated
with gloomy clouds of thoughts that stand out.
This starts the true war, where it's only you against you,
one with guilt sorry for you .
Sleepless nights, endless thoughts and crumbling stomach all surround,
there is no escape from the brain hell as it bounds,
all sins and cruel acts come around,
making it difficult for our own selves to be found.
Depressed as hell, the man sleeps crying to god,
asking some aid for the ache caused.
Finding no remedy , the panic makes him difficult to breathe
No one to talk to making it worse, he pleads,
He settles himself with few words to ease.
Waking up the the next day, carrying a fake smile
That's how a man just died without dying under the real pile.
Kudos to you kriti for such a profound piece of poetry dealing with dark common yet often unnoticed emotion with so much of finesse
It reflects you keen observation deep insight and ur talent with AKSHAR (words)
Fabulously penned
May almighty bless you
Keep writing keep smiling keep shining
Kudos to you kriti it really is a profound piece of poetry very finely portraying a darker often unnoticed emotion
Written with keen insight it reflects ur talent with AKSHAR (words) it like a movie in lines
May almighty bless you
Keep writing keep shining keep smiling š
What all.go through
Few dare to put it there!
Keep daring,
Consistent in sharing.
Let Love & longing
Pain & belonging
Sorrow &
hope-filled tomorrow
Keep feeding your poetry"s bone marrow.
Let vibrancy of life Keep triggering your pen
Afterall itās not everyoneās cup of tea to venture into words den!
Congratulations to the young poetess!
MVR
Dear Kriti, Your poem elegantly captures the profound struggle with guilt, an often overlooked aspect of human nature. I love how you deftly portrayed the intense internal battle, the sleepless nights, and the silent suffering. This evocative piece resonates deeply, highlighting the emotional turmoil and the unspoken pain that many endure but rarely acknowledged.
Emotions are often tough to deal with, especially guilt, one of the most complex and the one that killsā¦. How beautifully have you written it , the sophistication and the pain itās noteworthy.
Damnnnnnnnnnnnn šš³
Brooooo, cooollllll
How beautifully you have shown the adulting phase through your words.
May you jeep inspiring the world through your pen (the sword).
Dear Kriti
Your retention reminded me of Victorian times when gloom was real. Coming from a young adult, itās a welcome change seeing the next generation participating in taking the craft ahead.
God bless and many wishes for future endeavours.
Love and hugs
Dear Kriti
Your retention reminded me of Victorian times when gloom was real. Coming from a young adult, itās a welcome change seeing the next generation participating in taking the craft ahead.
God bless and many wishes for future endeavours.
Love and hugs
Kirti well described God bless u girl and keep writing
Kritiās poem depicts emotions with simplicity, exploring an often overlooked aspect of humanity. Hats off to the author for such insightful and relatable work.
What a MASTERPIECE! The way you expressed your thoughts with such grace & precision is incredible. Your talent shines through every lineā¦keep up the amazing work :)
Your poetry is truly captivating ! Your talent for expressing emotions is amazing. Keep Shining, you have a real gift :)
Awesome. Beautiful words!! Keep it up.
Truly mesmerizing. The choice of words to exhibit the emotions is absolutely perfect. Great depiction Kriti. Keep it up
Dazzling and Mesmerising are the words which can define this poem. Expressed in simplest way and woven with emotions ,that makes this a heart touching one . Great work !!!!!
Hi Kirti, Your poem āGuilt- The Closest Call to Deathā is compelling. Youāve captured the heavy burden of guilt and the silent battles it causes within us. Your words speak volumes about the human experience, reminding us to be empathetic and supportive of those who might be silently suffering. Keep writingāyour talent is truly remarkable!
Expressed in a very raw and gritty way. Absolutely breathtaking. Keep up the good work Kriti<3.
Awesome. Written fabulously. I really like the concept and brevity of this poem. You did an excellent job. I especially love the first four lines. Excellent expressions in the poem.
Truly leave me astounded. Kudos. Keep rocking Kriti. Warm Regards, Dr.K.Ganesb
What a masterpiece! A sad reality addressed with such delication, makes it hauntingly beautiful.
Outstandingā¦ Kriti, you have addressed such a mature topic with so much depth and sensitivity. The complex emotions have been wonderfully weaved into words. Extremely impressive!
Wonderfully written, truly creative š